Guess the Plot
Little Girl Blue
1. Miss Blue isn't happy as a schoolteacher. But was she really any happier living in the communal home with her cadre of Marxist friends?
2. When rookie cop Sarah Baxter is sent on her first undercover mission, she must catch the killer quickly... or miss her thirteenth birthday party.
3. Jessica struggles to be accepted in the harsh world of elementary school after an unfortunate accident involving a vat of blue dye.
4. Clinically depressed Danielle Clay just inherited a million dollars. Will her therapist/lover wrest control of it?
5. Pinky and Little Boy Blue prepare their daughter for the harsh realities of life in a society built on kitsch.
6. Now it can be told: the uncensored version of what went on between Smurfette and the men of the Smurf village.
Dear Evil Editor:
I am seeking representation and publication for my literary mystery, LITTLE GIRL BLUE.
I would like you to meet Abby Blue – first year teacher, new mother, recent wife, ambivalent failure. A year earlier, she lived in a communal house with her boyfriend and their cadre of Marxist friends, believing that monogamy was nothing more than an oppressive arm of the corporate state, [Corporations want you sleeping around. Especially those that manufacture penicillin.] and that the educational system was a sinister government tool to crush independent thinking. [Just the attitude I want in my kid's teacher. Apparently she lied on the job application where it asked, Did you ever blow up the administration building of a major university?] But. Because she became pregnant, she married. And because they were broke, she taught school, hoping that by doing, she would somehow come to love it. [Are we to assume she just decides to teach, and a school decides to hire her? Did she act as a teacher's assistant and get certified? What is she qualified to teach? Does she have a curriculum prepared? Has she purchased a bullet-proof vest? Evil Editor will assume these concerns are dealt with in the book.]
Alas, she does not. [Big surprise there.] She does not love the mindless drone insipid teacher meetings. She does not love the moronic papers she must grade, [Are you sure her name is Miss Blue, and not Miss Snark?] nor the twice daily need to pump breast milk for her baby while perched on a school toilet that may or may not be sanitized. [I wouldn't want to be the first-grader who accidentally walked into that stall. She'd think the Borg had assimilated Miss Blue.] And most of all, she does not love this school, broken by years of racial discord, staunchly ignored by an administration who refuse to admit defeat in the face of a force they cannot control. In addition, Abby Blue has a smart mouth and a penchant for insubordination, and her job is now on the line. [You know there's a teacher shortage when you can get away with mouthing off during your first month on the job.]
But when her favorite student meets a grisly end in the Varsity locker room, everything starts to change. The school, quietly divided by color and subdivided by class, pulls apart, and Abby finds herself desperately hanging on to both ends. After promising a tearful mother to search for the truth when the police would not, Abby is hurled into a world of gang violence, land lust, [Land lust? What, are homesteading teachers squatting in her classroom?] regular lust, [Ah, the hunky idealistic teacher across the hall drops by Abby's room after dismissal. Please tell me it's the hunky idealistic teacher, and not the brilliant but misguided punk student she's trying desperately to reach.] and slick public faces. She visits the prison, steals from crime scenes, [She steals one of those DO NOT CROSS ribbons, and puts it across the door to her classroom.] tracks down lost parents, and lies more times than she could count in her quest for answers. Cops clamp down, parents demonstrate, students riot, and the murders continue. [And this is just the junior high.] As Abby slowly pieces together disparate bits of a terrifying truth, the rash of violence looms ever closer, bites at the edges of her life, knocks at her door.
LITTLE GIRL BLUE is a novel that is at once an off-beat mystery, a teacher’s story, a marital journey, and a meditation on motherhood. [It's Everybook.] It examines broken neighborhoods, broken families, broken classrooms, broken women, [You're starting to sound like a broken record.] and most importantly, how a life has the power to touch another life. How we become more than ourselves. How we become whole.
I am a writer, teacher and mom, living in Minneapolis, Minnesota. My novel is complete, edited, re-edited and re-re-edited, not to mention sliced, diced, and, more than once, turned on its head. [Cute, but this is so long already, you don't have room for this.] It is eighty-one thousand words. If you would like to see the first three chapters of Little Girl Blue, I would be happy to send them, along with SASE, and any other pertinent details. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Hugs and Kisses, etc.
Dear Evil Editor:
Meet Abby Blue – first year teacher, new mother, ambivalent failure. A year ago she lived in a communal house with her boyfriend and their cadre of Marxist friends, believing the education system was a government tool designed to crush independent thinking. But because she became pregnant, she married. And because they were broke, she taught school, hoping she would come to love it.
Alas, she does not. She does not love the insipid teacher meetings, the moronic papers she must grade, the twice daily need to pump breast milk for her baby. And most of all, she does not love this school, broken by racial discord, and ignored by an uncaring administration.
When Abby's favorite student meets a grisly end in the varsity locker room, the school splits apart, and Abby is hurled into a world of lust, corruption, and murder. As she slowly pieces together disparate bits of a terrifying truth, violence looms ever closer to her door.
LITTLE GIRL BLUE is at once an off-beat mystery, a teacher’s story, and a meditation on motherhood. It examines broken neighborhoods, broken families, broken classrooms. Most importantly, it shows how one life has the power to touch another.
I am a writer, teacher and mom, living in Minneapolis. Little Girl Blue is complete, at eighty-one thousand words. If you would like to see the first three chapters, I will send them along. Thank you for your time and consideration.
This seemed too long. Snipping a phrase here, a sentence there, may have gotten it to a manageable length. If you want it longer, the short query with attached synopsis may be the way to go.