My car bounced over ruts on the macadam. The road twisted around blind curves, switchbacks and round-abouts as it climbed Mount Bigness. I heard the telescope rattle; nothing like subjecting optics to a kidney crunching drive through the country. It was the first clear night in two months and my last grade of the year.
The road curved back 180, dropped down and turned hard right. Trees blocked my sight as the car bounced up and slid over the gravel. A young man appeared in the headlights. I braked. He jumped backward and landed on the hood as the car slid to a stop. He stopped with his face near the windshield. I hugged the steering wheel. My hands shook. My heart raced.
"I ain't got no target on my chest, SpeedRacer." He slid off and rubbed his pale muscles through a plain gray shirt. I opened my window. Cold air rushed in. Chilled me. He lifted the broad-rimmed, black-felt hat to reveal black, curly hair.
"You hurt?"
"I'm OK. If that's what you want to know." The plain boy came to the passenger door and opened it. "As long as you didn't shit yourself, you can ride me home. It's just a little ways." He pointed up the slope. I nodded still stupid from almost killing him. He directed me past two farms, a couple outbuildings, admired my telescope, and pointed to the hilltop where the astronomy club aimed their instruments skyward. My nerves steadied as we talked.
"That's where I live," he gestured. I saw only headstones.
"A cemetery?"
"It's a home of sorts... I died when an 18-Wheeler hit my carriage. I'm an Evil Editor by day; an angel by night. You hit an oak. Wrecked real bad. You're dying fast. Soon you'll join us."
--Dave F.
Sunday, July 13, 2008
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9 comments:
Hey Dave! Enjoyed this, and was reminded of ole tyme campfire "scare-fests" when the "dead passenger" reveals all. Good one! Also cool/weird on the anachronisms, i.e. an 18-wheeler hit the carriage?!
ME
anachronisms?
He's a good Deustcher, very plain in a horse drawn cart.
EE as an angel of doom, interesting.
This one has an urban legends feel. I like it!
Vivid writing! The car drive reminded me of a winding mountain ride I took as an exchange student in Colombia (shows how long ago that was). The rules there were, apparently: 1) always take the inside lane no matter which direction you're traveling, and 2) don't worry: no one will be around the curve to meet you. At the bottom of the mountain directly below a particularly nasty curve was a graveyard for cars that didn't quite make it.
--Bill H.
Wonderful. I echo the campfire tales / urban legend sentiment.
Evil Editor as an ANGEL? Definitely fiction! And very well done fiction at that.
Your description was wonderful and took me on a ride. Reminded me of camfire stories as well. Good job with this one Dave.
Spooky. Nicely done, Dave.
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