Guess the Plot
1. The Sand Maven's amazing story begins with a sparkling seaside flirtation, moves into the shadowland of hanky-panky, slides through a dark gutter of scandal, and finally gropes its way from a dungeon of guilt to the glowing sunset of nostalgia. Plus, a murder mystery, a hurricane, and handsome pirates.2. A story of star-crossed loves, life's inevitable suffering, faith, and a perfectly crafted slingshot, partially set on Beach Boulevard.
3. As a hurricane blows in, Mae Wong and her crew of burly lifeguards dash along the beach trying to convince the last drunks to board the rescue bus to Kansas, but that diabolical gang known as the Weather Underground hovers nearby in an underwater sub -- preparing to unleash the full power of their Nuclear Vortexicating Implodimatic Blasticon! Will our heroes save Sandbar Bob in time?
4. When rich heiresses start finding their lost poodles washed up on the sand, everyone knows masked Detective Sgt. Bud Frickenshaw must find the Fiend Feline of Beach Boulevard -- before the pesky kitty kills again! But what about beautiful Evelyn Smith and her missing butler? And those surfboards the Jackson twins can't find???
5. Anaheim, California: a city where dreams go to die, where the cheap motels, bars and strip joints suck up more than their fair share of people. Detective Zack Martinez doesn't work here, but when the daughter of his second wife's new husband winds up dead outside the Matterhorn Bar, he knows he'll have to get involved.
6. Rathbone Surcote has a dream: to replace the white sand of SoCal with blacktop and organize the bitchenist race circuit in the world. Standing in his way is a militant organization of surfers, a group of environmentalists concerned about a bunch of terminally ill whales, and riptides capable of washing entire packs of competitors out to sea. But when a beautiful urban planner realizes there may be a way to ease congestion in the city's major arteries by routing traffic to the shore, Rathbone realizes he may have a chance.
Little nine years old Sonny Lacroix carved his sling shot from a single piece of pine wood. It was a beautiful work of art for a nine year old boy. He worked for days to carve its Y shape, and then spent another few days sanding its rough edges to perfection. It felt so good in his hand; so smooth. Who would ever think that such an innocent child's toy as this could set up a sequence of events which would have generations-long consequences for so many? [And yet when Sonny shoots an acorn at a chicken, who mistakenly assumes the sky is falling, it's not long before planet-wide war breaks out.]
Beach Boulevard is not just the story of star-crossed loves [as you might have assumed from my opening paragraph]; at a deeper level it asks the fundamental questions of faith: Can each of us survive life's inevitable suffering, without faith? If you have real faith, must it be tested?
Beach Boulevard as told to us by Rudy Lacroix begins in the early forties on Beach Boulevard in Bay St. Louis, Mississippi. It was a conservative time and place. The action in Beach Boulevard [What action? So far there's been no action except the three-day whittling of a block of pine into a Y shape.] moves to Los Angeles during the late fifties and sixties. We experience many changes through that era of cultural upheaval. Finally, matters resolve [What matters resolve? There've been no matters.] with a surprise ending back where we started: On Beach Boulevard. [The surprise is that something finally happens.]
Coming in at 85,000 words, Beach Boulevard is a Literary Fiction novel which allows each reader to answer those questions for herself. [What questions?] My name is XXXX XXXXXXX and I wrote Beach Boulevard for the mature audience.
The only part of this that isn't vague is the building of the slingshot, but we don't care how meticulous the kid is in carving and sanding his toy. We're willing to listen to one sentence telling us what he does with his toy that sets the story in motion, but after that we want to know who the characters are and what their goals and obstacles are. In other words, the plot. When and where aren't especially important. Who and what and why should be your focus.
Whose faith is tested? Who's suffering? Why does the story move to Los Angeles? Tell us something about the main characters. Tell us why we would want to read their story. This query doesn't provide any information about your story. Start over.