Nicholas’s roommate Bryce sat on the couch, watching television. “How long have you been here?”
“A couple weeks,” Bryce said, his voice higher than Nicholas remembered. “We didn’t think you’d ever return.”
“We?”
“Scott’s around.”
That wasn’t very surprising. “I don’t think his author will ever get over her block.”
“He wasn’t here when I first came,” Bryce said, shrugging.
“Interesting,” Nicholas said, studying Bryce. There was something different about him. His features were softer, and he had curves that no self respecting man should have. Nicholas’ blue eyes widened. “Weren’t you male the last time I saw you?”
“Not according to the final paragraph of page three hundred and twenty two,” Bryce said, glowering.
“And then your author got blocked.”
“Perfect timing,” Bryce said, her tone rueful.
Scott entered the room then, munching on an apple. “Pretty, isn’t she?” he asked, indicating Bryce.
“Very,” Nicholas agreed, smirking.
“I keep telling her to shave her legs,” Scott said, leaning up against the wall. “I think one of the Prince Charming’s across the street might try to court her if she did.”
“They just might,” Nicholas encouraged her. “You should try it.”
Bryce rolled her eyes. “I’ll remember this conversation the next time either one of you turns female.”
“Because a lady never forgets a slight?” Scott asked, raising his eyebrow.
“She’s far from a lady.” Nicholas laughed, but it was hollow. Bryce had a point. Anne had accidentally turned him into a woman a few times in the book. His eyes frequently changed color as well, and there was time when a very bad spelling error caused him to throw his own head. It was amazing how detrimental authorial negligence could be.
--Padewan
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7 comments:
This was a bit confusing at first, but once I got into it, it was absolutely hilarious.
I LOVED this one! Very funny! Your pacing and timing are natural.
Ah ha ha ha!
I hate to think what happens to these poor sods if she decides to write in future tense or something. This is soooooo brilliant. Needs boogers, though.
This is funny but if it is chapter one, it will be confusing. If it is any other chapter then it will work fine. IT takes a bit to get used to the setup but I wouldn't want to take the information in the last paragraph and shove it to the top. Perhaps if you said "Bryce, now Britany or Tiffany or Muffy"
Thank you Rachel! I guess I should have put up an explanation sentences...this is in the middle of a chapter and Nicholas has just returned to his apartment after giving his author writer's block.
I'm glad you liked it Chris, and that the timing is natural. Thank you!
Ooh I bet characters hate present tense, Mother Reproduces! (Almost as much as typos and rewrites! ;))
It actually is Chapter One, Dave, but it's in the middle of chapter one, in the middle of a scene. I should have put up an explanation. :o I love your suggestion about renaming Bryce! haha. (It's been hard keeping Bryce as "she". ;))
It makes me curious about the larger scope of the story. The reference to Prince Charming's across the street is reminiscent of Shrek's take on storybook characters. The whole thing has the fun of the old Looney Tunes where Bugs Bunny keeps erasing and re-drawing Daffy Duck.
I liked the lead in - the voice, the curves and then the realisation. The entire concept is intriguing - I'd love to see more of this.
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